I know the video isn't great. The square 8's had the outside part kinda cut off, but you're not missing much.
No roasting required, but I think you are suffering a bit by flying without experienced coaching or assistance. The video was fine, for the most part. There are a lot of good things about the flight (in particular, the lack of 25-foot bottoms that is common in INT and low Advanced) and it's pretty clean. The turn angles are mostly OK, too.
But coaching is about finding errors. I think the reason the square 8 was cut off is highly relevant - most of the flight was *huge*. The inside loops should fit in 45 degrees of circle, but are well over 90 degrees. The square 8 was close to 180 degrees, which is why it got cut off at the end. Your "45" is around 60-70 degrees and the squares are much wider than they are high.
I would highly suggest that you set out cones, surveyed out at 45 degrees apart on the downwind side of the circle. The easiest way to do this is to set out two of them at 180 degrees, split that in half, then split it again. The fly normally, ignore the cones, and watch the video afterwards, using your cones to measure your flights. I *do not* recommend you try to fly within the cones by watching for them, at least to start with, because they will come up much, much faster than you will expect, and if you try to jam the maneuver half the size, you will certainly push the airplane beyond the limits. A square loop is supposed to fit between two adjacent cones. Yours will be closer to or even exceed the second cone over.
You also have a prototypical example of what is shown here:
https://stunthanger.com/smf/open-forum/incessant-problems-1-hourglass-2nd-corner/msg494948/#msg494948 Your hourglass looks just like the first drawing, to the extent we can see it.
I think as you try to shrink it down, you will run into other problems, particularly with engine setup and trim. The engine sounds like it is coming on very hard at times, which is OK if you make the maneuver large enough to recover from it, but will be a problem if it is still changing when the next corner comes up. That's why flying large is so tempting, everything smooths itself out before you have to do the next element.
This is not at all an unusual situation. Guys who fly by themselves or without experienced help tend towards large and smooth maneuvers because it's much easier on the airplane, requiring neither tight corners nor perfect engine or trim. With what you have in hand, it may very well yield the highest score you can possibly get in a contest. If you were flying in a contest tomorrow, I would suggest trying to fix only the hourglass (since it should yield a nearly immediate improvement) and leaving the rest of it alone. But even if you perfected everything else about it, you would get stuck in the low-400s score range. The longer you go this way, the harder it will be to correct it.
Brett